It was a cool, brisk morning, much unlike the weather I was used too in the states. I sat on a small, wood bench and every few minutes I felt a heavy, cold breeze smacking me in the face, as I tried to stay warm. I didn’t need to move to find life as people and dogs and birds filled around the interior of the park near this large fountain.
Suddenly, the peaceful atmosphere broke, as I heard two men yelling nearby. “That’s a terrible idea.”
“Well, do you have a better one?” the tall, broad man replied.
“Uh maybe we should just call the whole thing off,” the very young looking man answered.
“Do you want more of the profit? Name your price!”
“No, that’s not it at all.”
“How about 30 percent?”
The tall man seemed to be getting angry. I moved a little closer in curiosity.
The young man thought for a moment and said, “Mike, we gotta get another person.”
“No DJ, that’s too dangerous.”
“It’s the only way I’ll do it”
“We only have three days. You know we can’t wait any longer.”
“We just need someone to guard the post incase we need to take another route. That doesn’t have to be taught.”
The DJ character began to yell, “BUT YOU EXCPECT US TO FIND SOMEONE HERE IN CANADA AND--” His voice echoed across the park and he had realized that everyone was now staring at them. After a few minutes of just standing there, the young man finally spoke.
“I thought we were suppose to keep a low profile-”
“Shut up…we are doing a good job so far”
“Alright, lets go get some food. I can’t think on an empty stomach.”
“Fine, but we’re almost out of money…we gotta be careful.”
The two men began to walk away towards the North end of the park. For some reason, I had the crazy idea of leaving the safety of this wood bench and following the men to find out more. I had my intentions set as I finally got up and also walked quickly to the North end of the park.
Suddenly, the peaceful atmosphere broke, as I heard two men yelling nearby. “That’s a terrible idea.”
“Well, do you have a better one?” the tall, broad man replied.
“Uh maybe we should just call the whole thing off,” the very young looking man answered.
“Do you want more of the profit? Name your price!”
“No, that’s not it at all.”
“How about 30 percent?”
The tall man seemed to be getting angry. I moved a little closer in curiosity.
The young man thought for a moment and said, “Mike, we gotta get another person.”
“No DJ, that’s too dangerous.”
“It’s the only way I’ll do it”
“We only have three days. You know we can’t wait any longer.”
“We just need someone to guard the post incase we need to take another route. That doesn’t have to be taught.”
The DJ character began to yell, “BUT YOU EXCPECT US TO FIND SOMEONE HERE IN CANADA AND--” His voice echoed across the park and he had realized that everyone was now staring at them. After a few minutes of just standing there, the young man finally spoke.
“I thought we were suppose to keep a low profile-”
“Shut up…we are doing a good job so far”
“Alright, lets go get some food. I can’t think on an empty stomach.”
“Fine, but we’re almost out of money…we gotta be careful.”
The two men began to walk away towards the North end of the park. For some reason, I had the crazy idea of leaving the safety of this wood bench and following the men to find out more. I had my intentions set as I finally got up and also walked quickly to the North end of the park.
5 comments:
This is a really good ending...by the end of the story, I too wanted to know why those two men wanted to keep a low profile...good use of dialog
this story is very interesting, it keeps you wondering whats going to happen next. i also like how you set up the setting in the beginning instead of just jumping right into the argument.
This is my favorite one. I like how you kept the reader in suspense. I agree with Konrad.. I too wanted to know why those men wanted to keep a low profile.
This is very interesting. You start off simple, just a man in the park and now you introduced this whole conflict and it makes the reader want to know more.
Good job Stefano. Could be expanded into a larger story, or, perhaps, a screenplay. COuld be a Matt Damon movie!
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